You have written a wonderfully imaginative and original story with plenty of twists and turns. I really like your multiuniverse setting with different time lines and the concept of the ‘Many Worlds Collective.’
“Clara’s character is well developed and the first person journal perspective makes the reader feel with her from the beginning.
“The story is very well written with plenty of vivid and original details that make the reader feel as if he is perceiving the scene directly.
“My only suggestion would be to reduce the number of comments in brackets.
“High stars and watchlisted for a really imaginative story and excellent writing.
“Best wishes and good luck in getting published,
The Serotonin Transfer“